Many people believe that a person’s culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that it has only minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Culture
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has become an identity for some people or some countries. It is argued that people think that a home
country
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has
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influence
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in shaping
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an individual’s
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culture
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, whilst others believe that
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of
origin
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has
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a small
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influence
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. In my opinion, an
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place can define
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a person’s
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culture
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, but we have another influencer that
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to their
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. On the one hand, family is a major factor
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can
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people’s
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culture
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, even though they live in a certain place for a long time. Parents, especially, are the influencers and teachers whom their children learn from.
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, an Asian family who live in western countries for generations. Even though they have been living in a
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with different
cultures
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since they were born, they still teach their children
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their
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’s
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,
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as give a respectful attitude to the elders or celebrate their traditions and
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once a year.
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,
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action can be influenced by the environment where they live in and it can be changed over time. They can be easily adjusted
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the new norms and
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and the changes will slowly
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their actions. It usually happens with people who are constantly moving to a new environment,
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move to a new city or a new
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.
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, in
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case, the
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place gives a small proportion in shaping
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action
instead
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their
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are changing
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on their surroundings. In conclusion,
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country
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has a big
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on
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culture
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though they can adapt
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a new environment and adjust
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the new customs.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural norms
  • Values
  • Traditions
  • Practices
  • Festivities
  • Cuisine
  • Language
  • Religion
  • Beliefs
  • Social systems
  • Institutions
  • Globalization
  • Media influence
  • Multicultural societies
  • Migration
  • Personal choices
  • Experiences
  • Education
  • Knowledge exchange
  • Economic factors
  • Homogenized
  • Cultural identity
  • Geographically concentrated
  • Individualism
  • Collectivism
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