A friend of yours is thinking of going on a campus holiday for the first time this summer. He / She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter - explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday - describe some possible disadvantages - say whether you would like to camping with your friend this summer

Dear friend, I hope you are great. I got a letter saying that you are seeking some advice about a camp holiday that you are planning
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summer. I remembered that
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was always on your bucket list, and very happy that you have
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decided to do
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adventurous activity.
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, there are a lot of activities that you can enjoy on
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journey.
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, rope climbing, tracking, and a bonfire are my favourites.
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, you will love the scenic beauty of the mountains.
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, I want you to be careful in the area, as
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activity is dangerous as well. I would recommend taking a map guide because you are not good at directions, and
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follow the trails only.
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, do not forget to bring warm clothes as the weather is cold at night.
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I want to join, my exams are
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summer. I hope the information above will help you with
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journey. All the best! Your friend, Ishaan

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task achievement
You should add a bit more detail in each section to strengthen your points.
coherence and cohesion
Try to make sure each paragraph has one main idea that is clear and easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to connect your ideas smoothly between sentences and paragraphs.
suitable writing tone
Your tone is friendly and inviting, which is great for a letter to a friend.
complete response
You included personal touches that relate to your friend's interests, making it more engaging.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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