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Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems. Do you agree or disagree?

#diet #meat #health
Some individuals believe that eating
meat
 can lead to severe health issues and
people
 should consume vegetables
instead
 of
meat
.
Animals
 and plants both are
main
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 parts of
human
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the human
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food-chain
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food chain
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;
thus
 I
am disagree
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disagree
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 with
this
 statement exactly but
this
 view is debatable. From
first
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the first
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 humans era,
people
 are used to hunting
animals
 and eat
meat
 as in history mentioned;
therefore
,
human
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the human
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 body has developed and adapted during the thousands of year with eating
meat
 as a meal.
Moreover
,
animals
 play a major role in
human
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the human
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 food network as
source
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a source
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 of some useful nutrients that we can't find
them
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apply
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in vegetables.
Furthermore
,
meat
provide
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provides
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 us with delicious meals and tasty food;
for example
, there are many
people
 all over the world who fond of eating several kinds of kebabs or burgers and can't stand
tasteless
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a tasteless
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 vegetarian diet. Needless to say, consumption of
meat
 has some limits that have made us
to
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follow some diet rules; long-term consuming
meat
 in large quantities can cause severe health problems
such
 as gout.
On the other hand
, there are some
people
 who reckon that
meat
 must be erased from
human
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the human
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 food schedule.
Firstly
, they should know that the process of getting
meat
 from
animals
 and preparing that for consumption provides
people
 with many occupation opportunities and has a direct effect on the economy of countries and
people
;
hence
,
this
 measure can cause many
people
face
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to face
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 financial problems. Eventually, according to the major role of
meat
 in
human
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the human
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 food-chain from past to
this
 era,
people
 cannot stop eating
meat
 suddenly; but, they should consume
meat
 in suitable quantities
besides
 vegetables to prevent health problems downing the road.
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