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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important enviromental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

#people #time #loss #species #plants #animals
It believes that
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 environmental issue of
this
 era is
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the lost
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lost
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 of specific creatures of
plants
 and animals how they embrace
main
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the main
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 living impact of human. In my view,
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 disagree
in
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 some extent, atmosphere
have
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huge
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a huge
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 impact on our lives, in some areas because of pollution people are prone to worst
helth
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health
. Since
last
 year,
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the corona
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corona virus
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coronavirus
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 has been shaken
world
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the world
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. because of it, everything in the world is stopped.
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, there is no
any
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work, even in hospitals there were no any vacant for patients, on the enormous level people are dying. I
teckon
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reckon
beckon
that is
much
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 more serious problem than loss of particular
plants
 species lost.
Plants
 species are providing us
clean
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a clean
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 environment in lost of them. Our environment is getting worst day by day. But yet humans live are much more
in
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dangerous
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 because of
others
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other
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 worst factors.
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 in previous decade there
were
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 news of
explosion
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an explosion
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 on earth because
earth
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the earth
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 was going to smash mars,
fortunately
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,fortunately
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 our earth remained safe, but
still
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 scientist alarmed us about natures explosion we have to be curious about our safety. In conclusion,
plants
 and animals specific species extinction create a bunch of
problem
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 rather than
this
. There
are
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 much more dangerous problem we do face,
likewise
 war between two countries, people were killed in
pelistine
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Palestine
pristine
philistine
 and
kashmire
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Kashmir
Kashmiri
 without mercy. Atom bombs are thrown on countries that destroying human lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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