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computers are becoming an essential part of education.discuss advantages and disadvantages

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Technology is always a
two-edge
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 sword,it will bring in many benefits,but
also
 many disasters.
Computers
 play a significant key role in today's studies.
This
 essay will suggest not only the benefits of studying from gadgets but
also
 illustrate the drawbacks of using them. In the past ,children go to school and study from blackboard,but due to the advancement in technology
computers
 were invented and very beneficial to mankind especially for students.children no need to worry to get the doubts cleared by teachers,simply they can use
computers
 to get the doubts clear.
Moreover
,today there are millions of websites where students can use them to study. By
this
 student save a lot of time by using them in their curriculum.
For example
 in a recent survey conducted by times magazine published that 80% of youngsters like
computers
 using for their study purpose because of the flexibility and significant amount of content and knowledge getting from them.
On the other hand
 ,there are cons by using
computers
 ,sitting in front of electronic devices will cause severe health issues in long run.The foremost problem students are facing nowadays is eyestrain,where water in the eyes gets evaporated and leading to
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dry eyes
.In the recent economic time's journal,it is published that 33% of children face dry-eye problem by studying online which is
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chronic problem in today's teenagers. To conclude ,
computers
 play a vital role in the present education system.Though there are lot many reasons for using them ,there are a wide variety of problems in using them
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