Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet Other however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Health is wealth. A healthy society can only create a healthy nation. The people fitness level is one of the criteria for the country development irrefutably.
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, a fair amount of people think that the
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authority to maintaining
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their own fitness and meals whereas
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believe that the ministry should ensure that their
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a strength meals
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. Viewing from the general perspective, the essay discusses both viewpoints, I personally agree with the former opinion for the following reasons.
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with, there are many reasons
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the
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own body and food because
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is not a ministry job
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means the cabinet has a lot of work rather than check their each and every
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fitness. If you
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live more years without any troubles, you should focus on their own body
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as doing
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exercise
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, walking, regular medical checkup. To be more precise each person should food
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conscious
whether healthy, unhealthy
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, they can get
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from the
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nutritious
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and will follow their diet plan.
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, Indian folks are eaten more traditional food rather than packets provisions
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, they have
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good well-being.
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, every person has a key responsibility to maintain
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their well-being along with
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.
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, the cabinet should ensure their population shape and table how they will be conducted
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medical camp
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every year.
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they must create
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awareness about any new diseases in order
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the community will be safe from deadly diseases.
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,
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ministry is conducted
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medical camp for their own citizens meanwhile they are provided
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and counselling sometimes they are doing operation in
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medical camp. To conclude, undoubtedly, each and every person should take care of their own shape along with good provisions whereas the
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ruling
party should check their citizens have a robustness life.
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, in my opinion about
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the government should assure their population robustness rather than the
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own responsibility because any deadly new virus will spread meanwhile the folks do not have any basic knowledge about the virus while the cabinet should create the awareness about particular virus
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is a key duty of the
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ruling
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health-conscious decisions
  • self-discipline
  • informed choices
  • personal accountability
  • regulating food industries
  • implementing policies
  • healthy eating
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies for healthy food
  • enabling environment
  • accessible
  • affordable
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