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People nowadays are used to disposable items meaning that they use things for a short time and throw them away. What is the cause of this and what problems it can lead to?

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The bar chart below illustrates the comparison of
population
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 and
wealth
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 shares in the different regions of the world in percentage ownership. It can be seen that the biggest part of
wealth
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share
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 is maintained in North America and Europe, while the
population
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share
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 is mostly concentrated in China and other Asia-Pacific areas. By analyzing the given information the conclusion would be that regions with low
population
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 percentage mostly have bigger global
wealth
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 than regions with high
population
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 percentage and vice versa. To overview all of the main details the
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share
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wealth
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 is incredibly poor in Africa, China, India, and other
lower income
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lower-income
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 countries in Asia and it doesn’t match their
population
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 level. Taking India as an example where 16% of the world's
population
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 owns only 1% of the world's
wealth
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. And
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 works on high
wealth
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share
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 countries
such
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 as North America (36 %) Rich Asia Pacific (24 %) and Europe as well (29 %) which mostly have the lowest
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 indicators.
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