Some people believe that it is best to acceot a bad sitaution such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.Others think that it is better to try and imrove the situation.Both view and your opinion.

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Life
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is full of up and downs.
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there are some people who thought it is essential to accept difficult situations and live with
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, the opponents consider that it is to fight against and achieve the desired goal. I, personally, support the latter’s view since
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ensures satisfaction in our
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.
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, accepting
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fate and living in
a undesirable situations
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undesirable situations
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is thought is best by some.
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is because
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otherwise
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the person would feel disappointment and agony about his situation, eventually, he may unable to live
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.
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, when a businessman lost his entire fortune, he accepted the fact and started to live with whatever he had.
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,
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scenario is extremely difficult to handle, so it would be better to try hard and make changes in
life
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to become successful, rather than living an odd
life
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. On one hand, it is obvious that fighting and trying against the mistakes and pitfalls which had encountered in our
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,
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would bring happiness and content in everyone ‘s mind.
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, achieving
goal
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a goal
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is something
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that would
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make a
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personally
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meaningful and motivate to go and chase the horizon.
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,
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, if a failed person committed suicide,
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action would not save him from his problems,
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, he could have accepted the fact and started a new chapter with more energy
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Therefore
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, it is better to fight the challenges which come across in the way. In conclusion, people have a different opinion on how to handle failures whether to accept or challenge
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them
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. I strongly believe that any problem is considered as an opportunity and work for it.
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