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In the world of the internet, people write product reviews of products and services. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Over the past years, the internet has
becone
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 for some people before purchasing their desired goods. They filter the information by reading
product
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reviews
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 both positive and negative
experience
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 from the buyers
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 the internet. In my opinion,
this
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micro blogging
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 trend in
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product
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the product
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 review section builds positive impacts
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 the buyers and the sellers. I will examine my reasons in the below paragraphs.
Firstly
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, the potential
customers
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 can have a fair
comparation
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comparison
 of the
products
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 from the honest
reviews
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 on the websites. Back
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 the past years, people's decision on buying the
products
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 was only controlled by the published
advertisments
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advertisements
 or the
brand
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amabassadors
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ambassadors
. In current days, it is
accessable
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accessible
 to check
product
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's quality and durability from the real
customers
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instead
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 of a rigid explanation and bias
experience
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 that are
exhibitioned
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exhibited
exhibition
 on the
brand
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's webpage.
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, the brands are benefited
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 the review through
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in
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on
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a
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apply
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various
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of
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platforms. If their
products
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 derive many
positve
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positive
reviews
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 from
customers
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, it can boost the
product
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 demand and spike the
brand
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's sales.
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, one of Kiehl's
products
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, Vital Skin Strengthening Super Serum became a talk of the town and the number one of Kiehl's serum in 2020 as they got many positive feedbacks from the beauty reviewers. It shows that the
product
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's review from the real users gives a positive impact
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 the business.
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, the
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's owners must maintain
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good
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 in order to avoid the pitfalls if the buyers
experience
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 bad services. In conclusion, telling a
product
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experience
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 through the internet platforms can create positive developments to both sides.
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, the amusement of
product
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experience
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 must be retained to protect
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brand's
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 reputation
on
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customers
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' eyes.
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