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More and more people these days are traveling overseas. Do the advantages of increased international tourism outweigh any of its disadvantages?

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Travelling abroad is one of
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 desired dreams of workers. To relish a good drink by the shore just to relax or to visit museums and know other cultures have rose the number of overseas visitants. In
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 with, not always the positives points of visiting foreign countries outweigh any of its disadvantages. Amid some of the arguments used to disqualify travelling with
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 purposes are the damage imposed directly to the environment. In spite of the fact that most individuals who decide to go on
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green adventure respect the rules of throwing rubbish only on a trash can, or not feeding wild animals with snacks, the increased human activity on that specific venue will lead to ecological impacts. To illustrate
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, one case in point would be the
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 of the coral reef in Recife, Brazil, where the growing number of cars, buses and planes
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 the city's warming climate and,
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, the coral destruction.
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,
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 setback
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 by more and more people flying overseas is the
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on
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the
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cost of living. To support
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, one notable justification is the process of gentrification, classified as the moving of natives homelanders from the city
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 to the suburbs.
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 process, well
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 cities that the hotspots visiting by foreign people
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 encouraged more than by non-international visiters. For
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 specific reason, fuel, supermarkets and rent on those places are extortionate, since tourists do not eke out just to live a minger living. To summarize, I do not believe that international travellers only bring joy and money to the country. Foreign tourism must not be always encouraged and the
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 do not outweigh the advantages.
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