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Lectures were used to be a way to teach large number of students, but with the technology available for education, there is no longer justification for lectures. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

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A huge proportion of scholars were taught by teachers delivering
lectures
, but with
internet
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avaliable
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available
 for education, there is no longer any
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explanation
 for the earlier. In my opinion,
although
internet
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 plays is a major factor
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 gaining information, it cannot be replaced in place of
lectures
 conducted in big
groups
. One of the significant
benefit
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 of sessions provided by teachers is that the questions related to the
topic
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 answered by experts.
In other words
, students are guided properly under supervision by
people
 excelling in their fields.
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Furthermore
,
lectures
 are
focussed
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 on one single
topic
 and
people
 from different background attend the lecture.
Thus
, all the different aspects of the
topic
is
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 covered and better understood and retained by children as
this
 normally follows a
two way
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 discussion.
For instance
, my class
lectures
 would often end up discussing a
topic
 as
people
 like to discuss various
senarios
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scenarios
 and opinions.
Therefore
, learning in large
groups
 and experts is crucial along with some soft skills in attaining knowledge. Another additional benefit of studying in a large group is developing interpersonal and employability skills. Students in
class
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the class
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 are usually encouraged to work together as a team for projects.
This
 helps them to develop their basic skills like communication and teamwork, which will
in turn
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 help them when they enter the real cooperate world.
For example
, Apple hires
people
 who are comfortable working in
groups
 as most of their work is carried out in teams.
Thus
, working together in big
groups
 will help finalist achieve success in
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 world. In conclusion, academic guidance with experts and
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teamwork
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team work
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 in large
groups
 will help children achieve greater success in comparison to students using technology for attaining knowledge.
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