"According to those in the travel business, the nature of the average 'holiday' is changing. Rather than seeking a relaxing break in a far-away place, people now want excitement on their holidays and are keen to participate in unusual and challenging activities. Do you agree or disagree?"

Holiday breaks are often considered pipe dreams for some young adults who have to deal with demanding jobs. Nowadays, a growing number of people argue that the way adults spend their holidays is completely different than in the past.

Instead

of visiting tourist attractions

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are located a thousand miles away, the majority of them prefer to experience novel

activities

in a place that are closer to their abode. I strongly agree with

this

statement because those

activities

could provide a better experience for them.

Firstly

, the reason why I believe involving in uncommon

activities

have become increasingly prevalent is that young generations want to get novel experiences from their short breaks. By and large, these

activities

could refresh their minds,

thus

, it could reduce their stress levels.

Furthermore

, compared with travelling, they do not have to spend a huge sum of money

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these

activities

. Perhaps a great example of

this

is glamping, which is currently mushrooming in my home country. Despite the fact that it offers luxurious camping experiences, the offered price is quite budget-friendly for millennials.

Moreover

, it is commonly taking place at the outskirt of megacities,

therefore

, people can commute easier either by private vehicles or mass transportations. Another reason would be to find priceless excitement by doing extreme

activities

. Obviously, younger generations who have a nerve of steel dare to do some extreme sports. In Jakarta,

for example

, a lot of people spend their holiday with their family and bosom friends in a place called Puncak for rafting.

Consequently

, adolescents tend to spend their typical weekend

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doing some challenging sports rather than travelling abroad. To sum up, as far as I am concerned, brand-new types of relaxing

activities

, which new and challenging, are becoming more popular these days. Unfamiliar and stimulating experiences are some of the primary causes of

this

trend which may lead to alteration of a conventional means of holidays.