Government should spend money on railway rather than roads? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many
people
argue about the government should spend the funding on developing
railway
rather than
roads
. In my opinion, I totally agree with spend money on the
railway
is the best way and I would like to explain the reasons. There are several facts to support my agreement.
First
of all, I believe funding on the
railway
brings more economic benefits than funding on
roads
because as the
railway
for the trains, it can afford more goods and citizens loading than cars.
For example
, the biggest vehicle for goods only can contain 100 tones or the most lag bus maximum for passing is 100
people
. While
,
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a train can contain a huge amount more than those large vehicles at one time.
Moreover
,the
railway
has a bigger environmental friendly advantage, because the train can contain a large number of goods and
people
. Which mean, if we build up more
railway
that makes
people
us there careless,
thus
reduce the
air
pollution issue. According to a
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one of the bigger
air
pollutions is from the vehicle, which mean more vehicle on the road there is more Co2 emission on the
air
.
In addition
, convert to the
roads
railway
is more reliable and cost less for the mantainness, because the
railway
marked by steel, there when it completed it can
last
for hundred years without any issues.
However
, for the
roads
, we have to give them attention almost every year to solve the problem
such
as fix some holds that made by heavy rain and heavy vehicles,
thus
cause a lot of money, and leads the traffic badly. To sum up, I strongly believe that the government spend money on the
railway
is a windstorm way because it has many positive effects on the economy , maintains, and
also
reduce
air
pollution.
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