More and more people are finding it increasingly important to wear fashionable clothes. Is this attitude to wearing clothes a positive development or negative?

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A rising number of individuals place more and more importance on having pieces of clothing that are
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tendency may be seen
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at a personal level, I believe it to be negative on a global scale. As our clothes can be considered to be our
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skin, the importance put on them could be substantiated by the following. For most, it is a matter of self-esteem and freedom of expression to own fashionable outfits. They may express their taste, success and
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to a particular social layer through wearing particular items of clothing.
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,
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interest in
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may later turn into a prospective career path for some people, once they decide to study in
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domain, and create their own
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labels in the future.
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, there are
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people who manage to make their passion for
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be a passive source of their income. They are usually celebrities who are paid by a
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brand to appear on
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brand's garment on social network sites.
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, I consider that
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perception of clothing could be detrimental at a global level. As the
fashion
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stipulates constant changes in preferences,
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is likely to escalate
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mass production.
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labels aiming to meet
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augmenting demand could close their eyes to the unsustainable origin of their fabric.
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may in turn give a
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rise to a number of sweatshops in developing countries where workers are underpaid and forced as well as child labour is applied. The
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but not the least victim of
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process is our environment. While the human footprint stemming from food and transport has been already affecting both flora and fauna devastatingly,
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clothing production at large scales would only exacerbate
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problem. In conclusion, despite the positive sides of owning fashionable clothes at an individual level,
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is, in my opinion, a complete negative development from a global perspective.
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