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Dear Admissions Committee: My name is Lt.Nitipong Sirinikorn. After I graduated from Chulachomklao Royal Military Academy my
first
position in the battalion was a Platoon Leader and now I am a Radio Relay Company Commander.
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communications, and they will
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professionally work and play important roles in communication units all over the world.
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military communication security.
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program at AIT. For the following reasons, I will
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experience with other students who come from many countries. In my opinion, AIT is one of the great
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in Engineering in
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at AIT because it is famous for developing highly qualified engineers and technologists who play leading roles in the
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graduate program in M.E.
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significant opportunity for me to join the ICT faculty in
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