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Many working people get little or no exercises either during their working day or their free time and have health problem as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about the problem?

#people #exercises #time #health #exercise
In the globalisation and
liberalization
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people
 are engaged with their graveyard shifts, they haven't enough time for doing extra stuff curricular
exercise
 it causes
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plethora of
health
 impediments. I will discuss
the
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why masses have not timed for
exercise
 or what should they have to do
for
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to
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 resolve
this
 issue. Admittedly, nowadays
masses
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the masses
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 haven't e enough
work load
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workload
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. They are working five to six days
in
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a week so they have only a few days found r spend with their family and friends. In their leisure
time
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 they
wants
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 to finish their household things rather than do
certain
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a certain
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exercise
 or do some yoga.
Furthermore
, competition level in every field
surge
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 up so
people
 should do their best so they ignore their
health
 they have spend most of the time with their gadgets or doing their assignments. There is some solution to rid those problems,
people
 should manage their working hours and their
health
. They should join the local gym which can help them to mitigate their
health
 issues.
Moreover
, individuals should go for a morning walk and do
their
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some favourite exercises daily with will be helpful for their physical fitness. To conclude,
exercise
 plays a vital role in everyone's life so,
people
 cannot ignore their
health
. They should
adapt
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adopt
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 some movements in their daily schedule which will be very beneficial.
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