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In some countries, increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food.government should impose hig tax rate on fast foodAgree or disagree

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Nowadays,
people
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 eating
junk
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 meal is being a trend, while more and more
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 getting health
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 by eating
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. Some
people
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 say that to deal with
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issue
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 the
government
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 should increase a large amount of
tax
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 on fast
food
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. In my opinion, I partly agree with
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, because
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 action might help to solve the
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 a little bit. To ,enhance the
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 on fast
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 might decrease
people
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 to choose the
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food
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 for daily dried because apply the heavy
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 leads the price of
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food
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 increased.
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,
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 might be thinking about having other
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 as an alternative ,
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 cook at home. If
people
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 could cook their meal at home it might help
people
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 eats in a healthy way.
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, I believe there are more effective ways to lead
people
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 to decrease eating
junk
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food
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 and make them live in a healthy way.
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 of all, education is one of the vital facts. Citizens choose to eat fast
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 because some of them are the lake of education about the consequence of eating fast
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,
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 as they do not know how much fats in the
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food
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 and it will cause them to become a chunkey person and
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 it will have a long-term harmful effect to their body.
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, exercise plays a significant role in
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's healthy,
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, the
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 should encourage
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 to eat less fast
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 and do more exercise, I think
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 is one of the best ways to lead
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 to get back to a healthy lifestyle . In conclusion, I think the
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 increasing the
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 on
junk
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food
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 might helps a bit. Whereas, if the
government
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 could consider the education and stimulate
people
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 to do more exercise it would be the best solution to solve
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issue
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 from the root.
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