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In many country, a few young people read newspaper or listen news in TV. What are the causes of it? What are the solutions?

News
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 is one of the ways to know and learn about things happening around us and in the world. Journalist
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 the people who summarise about all the events happened through a single platform like newspaper, web, apps and through television. It is certainly important for everyone to access one of the sources to read
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news
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. In the essay, I will discuss
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the probable causes that why only a few young people read
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. In pursuit of identifying the major cause, I found, young people are already under immense pressure to form their career. With growing competition, students have to focus and put their entire effort towards their
acedemics
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academics
 which leaves for them a little time to read
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.
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, Schools give massive assignments with
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periodic
 exams which takes up all the time of students.
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, even if students
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 to read, the format of the newspapers or other sources are not
youth friendly
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. It is full of plain long texts, with complex use of words, that
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loose
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 their interest after a period of time. There are many constructive solutions that have been undertaken by few media houses to grab more readers
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 as bringing in the use of infographics and pictures to attract youth to read and learn about the context.
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, in schools, a weekly session of current affairs can be arranged where every student needs to represent an article from
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 and explain what it says in their own words. In conclusion, it is very important for our young leaders to read
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 and understand what kind of situations are rising around them. Reading from various prospectives
,
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 will improve their knowledge on the issues,
that
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 will make them better
decision makers
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 in future.

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