This graphs shows the types of activities done by the elderly people in their free time from 1980s to the present in the United states.

This graphs shows the types of activities done by the elderly people in their free time from 1980s to the present in the United states.
The line graph illustrates different types of activities in
the
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free time
by
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the elderly from the United States during the period 1980 to 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that time consumption for these leisure activities
have
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increased over time except
going
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to the theatre
and
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which
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is measured in percentages.
To begin
, most recreational activities have increased gradually from the 1980s to the 1990s. Among these, there was a significant rise in the number of hiking to 2% per year.
Similarly
, the rate of reading has increased gradually by 10% over the ten years, which was followed by a sudden fall to 20% in the 2000s and again a sharp rise to 60% in
2010s
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.
Next
, the elderly spent less on surfing the internet between the 1980s and 2000s, but
then
it grew rapidly for the remainder of the period.
In contrast
, the number of percentages of going to the theatre
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declined considerably during the period
1980s
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and 2000s by 20% followed by a steady rise to 45% in 2010.
Nonetheless
, watching TV is standing as the
second
most popular entertainment among the elderly despite a slight fall in 2010 by 5%.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Elderly
  • Recreation
  • Leisure time
  • Hobbies
  • Physical fitness
  • Passive entertainment
  • Social engagement
  • Technology adoption
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Time period
  • Comparative analysis
  • Health care advancements
  • Retirement lifestyle
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