This graphs shows the types of activities done by the elderly people in their free time from 1980s to the present in the United states.
The line graph illustrates different types of activities in
the
free time Change the word
their
by
the elderly from the United States during the period 1980 to 2010. Change preposition
of
Overall
, it can be seen that time consumption for these leisure activities have
increased over time except Correct subject-verb agreement
has
going
to the theatre Change preposition
for going
and
is measured in percentages.
Correct word choice
which
To begin
, most recreational activities have increased gradually from the 1980s to the 1990s. Among these, there was a significant rise in the number of hiking to 2% per year. Similarly
, the rate of reading has increased gradually by 10% over the ten years, which was followed by a sudden fall to 20% in the 2000s and again a sharp rise to 60% in 2010s
. Correct article usage
the 2010s
Next
, the elderly spent less on surfing the internet between the 1980s and 2000s, but then
it grew rapidly for the remainder of the period.
In contrast
, the number of percentages of going to the theatre has
declined considerably during the period Unnecessary verb
apply
1980s
and 2000s by 20% followed by a steady rise to 45% in 2010. Change the article
the 1980s
Nonetheless
, watching TV is standing as the second
most popular entertainment among the elderly despite a slight fall in 2010 by 5%.Submitted by Shwe Yamin on
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