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Even though organic fruits and vegetables are more expensive than conventional fruits and vegetables they are worth the extra cost. Do you agree or disagree?

#fruits #vegetables #cost
Nobody would dispute the fact that we should have
fruits
 and
vegetables
 in our diets because they make our body healthier.
However
, some people think that we should spend the extra money to buy organic
products
instead
 of
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.To my mind,
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organic
vegetables
is
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 worth
of
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the
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they
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the
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 cost and we definitely should buy them.In
this
 essay, I will discuss both statements and give
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 opinion. On the one hand, nowadays
the
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organic
products
 are more available in
grosseries
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groceries
 and supermarkets.I reckon that there are a lot of advantages
in
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this
 kind of food.
For example
,
the
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vegetables
 and
fruits
 are grown without the use of artificial chemicals and hormones that can harm your stomach.
In addition
, I used to eat non-organic cucumber but it poisoned me and I had a terrible stomach ache.
Moreover
, studies show that
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organically grown
fruits
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have more nutritions and vitamins.
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 the other hand, a lot of companies are producing fake natural
products
 that
cointain
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contain
 a lot of
chamicals
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chemicals
.
Unfortunatly
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Unfortunately
, they are telling the
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customer
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costumer
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customer
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 that their
pruducts
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products
 are original and they are not
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 of
they
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the
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 cost.I assume that people should be very careful when they are choosing the
fruits
 or
vegetables
 in the
grosseries
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groceries
.
However
, there are several studies
found
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 no difference in organic and non-organic food. To sum up, I reckon that natural food is much better and it
cointains
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contains
 more nutritions.
In addition
, I think that choosing between
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products
 depends on people choice and everyone should eat what they like and prefer.
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