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In some countries today, there is an attitude that anyone can do it in the arts-music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?

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The provided graph illustrates the
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 of
oil
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 capacity per
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 in six countries,measured in millions of barrels. As an overall trend,it can be seen that the
oil
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 generated in provided countries increased in the given period of time.
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,the
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production
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 in Qatar is nearly the same as at the beginning of 20 years period. In 1990,the
oil
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 capacity generated in Qatar is just below 1
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 per
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,and there was an upward trend to 1
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 per
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 in 2000 where it slumps again to about 0.5
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 per
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 at the final end of the period.
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,Saudi Arabia produced over 8
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 barrel per
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 in 1990,and it sharply shot up to over 14
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 per
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 throughout the given years.
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oil
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production
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 capacity in Iran starts at 3
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 per
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,it rose up to nearly 4
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 in 2000 and ended up in over 4
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 per
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 in 2010.Iraq,Kuwait and UAE generated
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 at around 2
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 at the beginning of the given time,and their
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 has an improvement of nearly 2
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 and ended in around 4
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 barrel per
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 by the year 2010.
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