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In some countries today, there is an attitude that anyone can do it in the arts-music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?

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The provided graph illustrates the
production
 of
oil
 capacity per
day
 in six countries,measured in millions of barrels. As an overall trend,it can be seen that the
oil
 generated in provided countries increased in the given period of time.
However
,the
oil
production
 in Qatar is nearly the same as at the beginning of 20 years period. In 1990,the
oil
 capacity generated in Qatar is just below 1
million
 per
day
,and there was an upward trend to 1
million
 per
day
 in 2000 where it slumps again to about 0.5
million
 per
day
 at the final end of the period.
On the other hand
,Saudi Arabia produced over 8
million
 barrel per
day
 in 1990,and it sharply shot up to over 14
million
 per
day
 throughout the given years.
Although
oil
production
 capacity in Iran starts at 3
million
 per
day
,it rose up to nearly 4
million
 in 2000 and ended up in over 4
million
 per
day
 in 2010.Iraq,Kuwait and UAE generated
oil
 at around 2
million
 at the beginning of the given time,and their
production
 has an improvement of nearly 2
million
 and ended in around 4
million
 barrel per
day
 by the year 2010.
Submitted by Shwe Yamin on

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