In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new fast trains between cities. others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The graph indicates the activities that the elderly
people
in the United States do in their free time from 1980 to the present. Overall, it can be seen that most of the old
people
do hiking in their free times in the given period. According to the graph, the numbers of old
people
who go hiking has grown significantly since the 1980s. At the start of the 1980s, there was only 20% of
people
who do hiking but there was exactly 80% at the end of the given time.
In contrast
, there was a 20% drop in going to the theatre between the 1980s and 1990s.
However
, it returned back as a popular activity from the late 1990s to the 2010s. Surfing the internet is the
second
most popular activity that elderly
people
in the United States do.
Although
it increased slowly between the 1980s and 2000s, it was a leap behind the 2000s . On the other side, reading is
also
spent as much as surfing the internet . There were fluctuations in the early years but they significantly raised in the late period.
Last
but not least , watching TV was
also
popular among old
people
in the early three decades but there was a slight drop in percentage , from 70% to nearly 60% . At
last
, we can see that most of the old
people
like spending their spare time hiking.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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