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Advances in health and biology and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better time to be alive than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Biology is one of the most important areas of
science
 due to its direct relationship to survival and health. Observing the rapid advances made, it has been suggested that it is presently the optimum time to be alive.I strongly agree with
this
 affirmation for two reasons,
firstly
 lives have been improved, and risks have been reduced.
Firstly
, comparing life with a century ago it is possible to list new benefits available
such
 as hospitals, doctors, medicine, diagnoses, donors, and transplants, all of which were extremely rare previously. Advances in the sciences have improved lives across society considerably.
For example
, consider an operation in France several years ago whereby a woman received a face transplant.
This
 would be unthinkable in 1910,
therefore
, due to ,
science
 her life has undoubtedly improved.
Secondly
, health risks have fallen incredibly, so much so that it is possible to visit tropical countries which previously carried considerable dangers.
This
 is because traditionally preventative measures
such
 as vaccinations, immunisation, and prescription tablets did not exist.
In addition
, over the
last
 thirty ,years their cost has fallen rendering exotic travel available to almost anyone with the funds.
Therefore
 modern
science
 has increased the opportunities and reduced the risks related to travel, there has been no parallel in history.
Moreover
, a lot of people are being cured with help of new technologies.
For instance
, my brother was cured with help of tablets. To conclude, I strongly agree that biology and improvements in
science
 have increased people's well being and their opportunities to explore the world.
This
 is undoubtedly the
first
 time in history
such
 situations have existed.
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