The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The graph presents the registration of international and Australian
students
in Australian universities for a decade.
According to
the data, both the entry of foreign
students
and the native
students
went up over the course of 10 years
while
there are more domestic
students
relatively. Generally, the
number
of overseas
students
seems to have a similar trend at the start of the semester and the end and the
number
of
students
is merely above 80 thousand in 2010. Since they move to Australia
decided
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and decided
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to study there, meanwhile, citizens have options to study abroad.
However
, in the account of the
second
graph, there seem to be more
students
of ted above 600 thousand by the end of the semester in 2010 which is way above the
number
of international
students
. Obviously, more Australians will attend their national university out of convenience and at a lower cost
while
international
students
may be in a lesser
number
.
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