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All education and healthcare should be funded by government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#education #healthcare #government
Healthcare and education
services
 are both essential parts of humans life.It is sometimes argued that
governments
 should provide these
services
 for everyone without paying fees.While I accept that poorer members really need
this
 type of free
services
,
however
, it does not mean that everybody can utilize them. On the one hand, I agree that every country should provide good healthcare as well as education
services
 for their citizens.Without adequate healthcare people of all ages can become sick and
also
, if doctors have not enough knowledge they will have difficulty treating patients.
As a result
, the number of patients will increase in the world.
Thus
,
governments
 should at least provide these amenities to poor citizens as soon as possible.In fact, if poorer inhabitants may get ill,they cannot afford
taking
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 care of themselves due to other problems they have
such
 as supporting their families and the number of taxes.
On the other hand
, we may all wish for these vital facilities to be provided free of charge,
however
,some people do not understand that
governments
 spend
this
 income to build hospitals,schools as well as produce adequate medical equipment and medicine for us.
Additionally
,these
services
 and equipment take a great deal of money
therefore
,
governments
 need to obtain it from somewhere.Even though, countries allow these
services
 free for people, in
this
 case,they will increase the amount of taxes.Owing to the fact that every activities and
services
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 based on each other and maintain
countrie's
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countries
country's
 discipline. In conclusion,it seems clear that poorer members of our society need
this
 type of aid their life,while others should adapt to pay fees for
services
,
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 because these incomes spend our benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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