Some people argue that arts, such as paintings and music, are a waste of money and the government should spend this money on other public services. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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is currently a contentious argument over whether administrations supposedly reduce the expenses on every
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of
arts
and transfer that capital to the public services. I totally disagree with
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opinion because
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are bounded with every other
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life and
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it has a soul that makes our lives beautiful and enjoyable.
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the
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arts
is not something
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separate
from anything else in the world that we are living in.
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horrible
notion
to think of. The
first
reason is keeping the balance of everything. To illustrate
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imagine a world which only has robotic employees, ignorant employers, unaesthetic buildings, bad-designed
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this
is exactly something we
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need.
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the worst part of reducing all the efforts towards the
arts
will be affecting our education system.
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of person and
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there will be no
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inventions as often as it was. Another reason why I do not support the
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that spending the funds of
arts
in public services
instead
of the
arts
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happiness.
Firstly
every action that has been taken on the earth has the same goal ultimately; to being happy. If the governments had taken a sudden decision like cutting off the expenses of the
arts
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public services, that would have caused a revolt in many younger groups of people.
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it might be
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expensive decision to take due to
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effects of protests. I conclusion, ı
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disagree that the
notion
of spending the money that belongs to the
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subjects for something else because it can not be separated from
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life itself and eventually it would
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only unhappiness and destruction to
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society. Given
this
situation, it seems that today's routine is not the best but it is very much better for the
notion
which we have discussed.
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