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Some people believe that excessive use of modern technologies, such as computers and smartphones, is negatively affecting the reading and writing skills of our young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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people are
reliable
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 on
electronics
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 gadgets. Many people think that nowadays, youth is dependent on technology
such
 as mobile phone to read and write. They are concerned that it has
negative
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 impact on the children. In my opinion, I agree with the statement to some extent and
also
 believe it has some benefits too.
This
 is essay will discuss it in forthcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, Pupils these days are mainly dependent on computers and
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smartphones
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smart phones
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smartphones
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 to complete their homework and assignment. With
this
, children's writing is affected. They prefer to use acronyms. Almost all the
smart phone
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 install with
keyboard
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a keyboard
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 that has spelling checking software. many
students
 do not know
what
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the exact spelling they use
spell
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a spell
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 checker to correct
particular
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 word.
For instance
, In a
school
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 a spell check quiz was conducted in which 95%
students
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 did not know the exact spellings.
Moreover
, student's reading skills are
also
 not good because they prefer to take
lecture
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 from
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Google. They just
listen
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 the lecture. They
also
 do not know how to spell
a difficult words
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.
On the other hand
, some people believe that with technology it makes pupils life easier. They make assignment quickly without any hesitation. They
also
 show interest in lecture while listening rather than reading.
For example
, In a secondary
school
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 it was found that
students
 show more interest
on
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tecnology
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technology
 and their grades improve. To conclude, In my opinion, reading and writing skills are declined because of smartphone spell checker software.
However
,
students
also
 show interest in the studies and improve their grades.
Submitted by Rajwinder Kaur on

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