The rise of convenience food has helped people keep up with the speed of modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

That’s not a secret that today’s hectic lifestyle affects all areas of our life. Our diet is not an exception. More and more
people
all over the globe choose ready-to-eat
meals
instead
of home cooking. Despite that processed
food
is unhealthy and leads to obesity and other troubles with
health
, its popularity doesn’t disappear due to the convenience. My essay will discuss
pros
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& cons of
this
modern trend. Commercially prepared
food
has a variety of drawbacks. Starting from shady contents which can be used, and finishing with ecological footstep it brings to our planet. But as I see, the main problem with fast and processed
food
is
a
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harmful impact which it brings to our
health
. Not only it contains excessive preservatives to keep it fresh for several months, but
also
manufacturers add taste enhancers so we keep craving all of these products. Damaging impact on all the systems of
human
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body has been proven by scientific studies so many times. The more
people
consume convenience
food
, the more
people
with
health
problems there are in our society and the more pressure it gives
to
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our
health
care system.
This
doesn’t seem to me as something good.
On the other hand
, commercially prepared
food
can be not only a
time saver
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,
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but
also
the only available option for some
people
in some circumstances.
For instance
, a lot of working places in remote areas, like coil mines or construction grounds, just don’t have any opportunities for placing a kitchen to provide freshly cooked
meals
to employees. So, there’s no other way to feed
people
except using processed
food
.
Otherwise
, they would just
starving
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which is even worse for a person’s
health
than any fast
food
. To conclude, I would like to say that ready-to-eat
meals
are undoubtedly saving time and lives of so many
people
day by day. But anyway, we shouldn’t rely on them on our daily basis. We should take care of our
health
and feed ourselves with the best
food
available. If it’s not possible to find the time for cooking fresh healthy
meals
every day, we should try to do it at least 3 times a week. If we do not take care
about
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ourselves, who would do it
then
?
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