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The diagrams below show the design for a wave energy machine and its location

The diagrams below show the design for a wave energy machine and its location
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The pictures provide information regarding a turbine structure
as well as
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 where its
places
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 in optimum spots. We can be seen that a
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wind - generator
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wind-generator
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 machine is composed of a high steel tower and three blades to generate the amount of
wind
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. To be more precise, Blades made of fibreglass or wood that connected with a
wind
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 sensor to show the direction of the
wind
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as well as
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wind
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 speed.
Moreover
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, that machine produces 1.5 megawatts of
wind
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 power harnesses.
In addition
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, the information is received from a computer , which controls three blades to determine an accurate direction and angle. As is shown in the
second
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 diagram, the locations of
wind
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 turbines bring different drawbacks and benefits to
harness
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wind
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 power. When a turbine
wind
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 is installed on the hillside where strength position
to collect
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collects
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 strong
wind
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about
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 1.5 megawatts.
Similarly
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, a
wind
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 turbine installation
also
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 exposes the amount of
wind
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 in the sea,
the
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 landscape
not
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 spoil.
However
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, a
wind
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 machine is placed on the rooftop to impact on
wind
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-power generator.
This
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 is
due to
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 the fact that the
wind
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 level is lower to just create 100 kilowatts. In conclusion, it can
be witness
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 that three machines place
the
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apply
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different
position
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 and the air strengths depend on the location to produce
wind
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 power.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wind with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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