The diagrams below show the design for a wave energy machine and its location

The diagrams below show the design for a wave energy machine and its location
The pictures provide information regarding a turbine structure
as well as
where its
places
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in optimum spots. We can be seen that a
wind - generator
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machine is composed of a high steel tower and three blades to generate the amount of
wind
. To be more precise, Blades made of fibreglass or wood that connected with a
wind
sensor to show the direction of the
wind
as well as
wind
speed.
Moreover
, that machine produces 1.5 megawatts of
wind
power harnesses.
In addition
, the information is received from a computer , which controls three blades to determine an accurate direction and angle. As is shown in the
second
diagram, the locations of
wind
turbines bring different drawbacks and benefits to
harness
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wind
power. When a turbine
wind
is installed on the hillside where strength position
to collect
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strong
wind
about
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1.5 megawatts.
Similarly
, a
wind
turbine installation
also
exposes the amount of
wind
in the sea,
the
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landscape
not
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spoil.
However
, a
wind
machine is placed on the rooftop to impact on
wind
-power generator.
This
is
due to
the fact that the
wind
level is lower to just create 100 kilowatts. In conclusion, it can
be witness
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that three machines place
the
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different
position
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and the air strengths depend on the location to produce
wind
power.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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