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Some parents believe that watching TV and playing computer games should be limited and substituted by reading books. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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It is widely noted that TV’s and computer
games
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 have become a fixation with youngsters, and parents believe that the time
children
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 spend in front of the TV and electronic
games
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 should be reduced and diverted to reading or studying. In my opinion, I agree with
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 viewpoint and
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, watching TV and playing computer
games
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 have many advantages, when it is moderately done. Starting with video
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,
children
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 are introduced to the latest of technologies
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this
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In addition
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, there are a few
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providing
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 practise in logical thinking, and
problem solving
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 methods.
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PUZZLEGAME
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PUZZLE GAME
 on
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PlayStation
playstation
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a playstation
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,
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 is considered the best for
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 to improve their analytical skills. Reading books
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 the other hand, is crucial, as they provide active learning skills for
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 whereas video
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 is
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passive
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, each individual will have a different view in perceiving and imagining a story, while TV’s portray the story only
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 a single angle. To conclude, even though TV’s and PC
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 have their good qualities, there must be a balance maintained between active and passive activities. All these are required for the comprehensive development of a child, and it is the duty of the parents to know to prioritize and allocate time equally.
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