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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produce

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It is certainly true that today's lifestyle has become so insensitive and uncivil
that
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 ever. The level on which the
waste
produce
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products
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 have been raising is unimaginable. As a consequence, there
has
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 been many impacts on
natural
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the natural
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 ecosystem. There are
number
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 of reasons behind
this
;
firstly
, unwanted use of plastic and other packaging material leading to piles of wastage. Companies in order to maintain the durability of their product
in addition
 not to increase the cost of
produce
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; use non-degradable materials in packaging.
Moreover
, there is no proper
waste
 management system used by the factories and industries which is one of the major causes of
waste
.
Secondly
, there are no proper rules applied
on
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 household rubbish. People do not differentiate the
waste
 according to its degradability leading to difficulty in
disposing
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this
waste
.
Consequently
,
environment
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the environment
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 is impacted and it becomes difficult to quantify
these
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waste
. There are plenty of ways in which government can put efforts to reduce
the
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waste
.
To begin
 with, the already imposed laws on
industrial
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the industrial
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 sector should be revived and made more rigid so that these sectors are monitored and charged for any breach of rules.
Secondly
,
general
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 public should be educated on how to collect and
dispose
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 their
waste
. Along with, many facilities at public places should be made available so that
waste
 management is made easy. To supplement
this
,
new
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 law should be imposed on household
waste
. In conclusion, adequate facilities, proper education, new rules and regulations would help in reducing
waste
.
However
, considering our climate and mother earth, we should regulate
our selves
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 and should
tale
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take
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 active steps to manage and reduce
waste
.
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