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Some people say it is more important to plant trees in the open spaces in towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extant do you agree or disagree?

#people #plant #trees #spaces #towns #cities
Global Warming has become a global issue and a big threat for our
next
 generations. One of the reasons is the massive
development
 in the
cities
 that lessens a green space in some areas.
Therefore
, many
people
 think that planting trees in
towns
 or
cities
 is far more needed than building more
houses
. In my opinion,
although
 we need to take action in preserving our Earth,
a
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house
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housing
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development
 can be
also
 important especially in
the
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crowded
cities
. On the one hand, a green life movement has been taking
in
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 action by many
people
 who concern with the major issue. Many big
cities
 and
towns
 have small green spaces which impacted good
air
 production.
Thus
, those who live in megapolitans have a small chance to
breath
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 unpolluted
air
.
For example
,
people
 who live in Jakarta, which always be in
top
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 10 capital city with bad pollution only get
30
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% of chance
in
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breathing
health
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air
.
Also
,
a
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low quality
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air
 can worsen our body health. So that,
people
 in
towns
 need some green spaces in order to retain their health.
On the other hand
, the government cannot resist
the
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further
development
 in the capitals. Most
of
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big
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towns
 have
big
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 population. If the governments reduce
house
 building, many
people
 will face difficulty in finding a private place.
Instead
 of reducing a quota of residences, the government could organize a regulation of green buildings.
For example
,
house
 developers only build vertical
houses
 with green building requirements. The vertical
houses
 should be built with a good
vetilation
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ventilation
 so the residents do not need to install more
air
 conditioners. To sum up, the population is getting bigger and the green spaces are getting smaller.
However
, we cannot resist the
further
 changes in the
house
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development
. As a solution, the
house
 developers, which are regulated by the government can innovate the
houses
 with green life approaches.
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