Some people say it is more important to plant trees in the open spaces in towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extant do you agree or disagree?

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Global Warming has become a global issue and a big threat for our
next
generations. One of the reasons is the massive
development
in the
cities
that lessens a green space in some areas.
Therefore
, many
people
think that planting trees in
towns
or
cities
is far more needed than building more
houses
. In my opinion,
although
we need to take action in preserving our Earth,
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house
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development
can be
also
important especially in
the
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crowded
cities
. On the one hand, a green life movement has been taking
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action by many
people
who concern with the major issue. Many big
cities
and
towns
have small green spaces which impacted good
air
production.
Thus
, those who live in megapolitans have a small chance to
breath
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unpolluted
air
.
For example
,
people
who live in Jakarta, which always be in
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10 capital city with bad pollution only get
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% of chance
in
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breathing
health
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air
.
Also
,
a
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low quality
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air
can worsen our body health. So that,
people
in
towns
need some green spaces in order to retain their health.
On the other hand
, the government cannot resist
the
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further
development
in the capitals. Most
of
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big
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towns
have
big
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population. If the governments reduce
house
building, many
people
will face difficulty in finding a private place.
Instead
of reducing a quota of residences, the government could organize a regulation of green buildings.
For example
,
house
developers only build vertical
houses
with green building requirements. The vertical
houses
should be built with a good
vetilation
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ventilation
so the residents do not need to install more
air
conditioners. To sum up, the population is getting bigger and the green spaces are getting smaller.
However
, we cannot resist the
further
changes in the
house
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development
. As a solution, the
house
developers, which are regulated by the government can innovate the
houses
with green life approaches.
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