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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion

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In recent year, the world has seen
unprecedented
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 increase in the number of
people
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 learning a foreign
language
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. Few
people
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 claim that the reason to learn a foreign
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 is to
travel
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 and work abroad.
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, others claim that these are not
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 reasons why
people
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 should learn
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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.
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 essay will delve into both points of view. As per my opinion, apart from job and travelling perspective knowing a foreign
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 has many other advantages. On the one hand, most of the
people
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 in
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 world are keen to learn a foreign
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travel
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 and job perspective only. In recent years, globalisation has brought us soo close and multinational economies are collaborating which demand
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 to work with each other.
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,
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 in the number of
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 working overseas resulted in an increase in demand for learning a foreign
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 to
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,
people
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also
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 learn
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 if they want to
travel
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 to overseas countries.
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, when
people
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travel
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 abroad they prefer to learn the basic local
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 so that they don't face any trouble
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there.
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, there are various other benefits of learning a foreign
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,
people
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 need to have knowledge of diverse languages as it certainly helps in knowing various cultures and traditions of other
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, it is crucial for personal and career growth as it can help
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 in moving to developed nations and by knowing the
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 they can easily become a part of that country.
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, many
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 are migrating to
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Canada
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 nowadays and knowing
french
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the french
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language
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 can help
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people
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 to mingle up with local
people
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 much faster as it is the
first
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language
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 over there.
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,
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knowing
 different languages can be beneficial in many other ways. To conclude, there is no denying the fact that
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 primarily learn
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 to
travel
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 or work abroad. But it is quite evident that there are far many other advantages
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than
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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