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While some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem which we have at the moment; while others believe that deforestation has a more devastating impact on our world. Discuss both sides and give your opinion:

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.Some individuals reckon that global warming is the most important environmental issue; whereas, some others think that the destruction of jungles has more importance rather than global warming.
Firstly
, we should consider that there is
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 correlation between these issues and both of them are related to
climate
change
; but, which one can have more impact on the
world
 rather than another one? There are some people who believe that global warming should be our main concern, nowadays. In the modern era,
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 of industrial substructures all over the
world
 has been caused several environmental issues
besides
 its benefits;
for instance
, one of these hazardous problems is the
climate
change
 that has been lead to global warming.
Moreover
,
climate
change
 has many causes
such
 as the consumption of fossil fuels, greenhouse effects and etcetera; while, we must be aware that
deforestation
 plays a major role in term of
climate
change
 on account of its effect on global warming.
On the other hand
, some individuals reckon that the destruction of forests is more worth paying attention to rather than global warming and scientists have to provide a viable solution for
this
 problem. In my view, considering the
deforestation
 must be our priority because according to the statistics,
deforestation
 has had the most proportion among factors that can lead to global warming.
Therefore
, it is obvious that if we prevent
deforestation
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world
 in a critical circumstance and governments all over the
world
 must manage
this
 issue;
additionally
,
firstly
, we had better consider
deforestation
 because
this
 is the main reason for global warming.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Greenhouse effect
  • Industrial emissions
  • Sea levels
  • Extreme weather events
  • Biodiversity
  • Carbon emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Paris Climate Accord
  • Carbon cycle
  • Soil erosion
  • Water cycles
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Reforestation
  • Sustainable forest management
  • Indigenous communities
  • Localized impacts
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