Public libraries should only provide books and should not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media such as software, videos or DVDs. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent times, the need to reconsider how public
libraries
spend their resources is an issue all over the world. Nowadays, it is believed by some that public
libraries
should invest their foundings into books rather
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modern
technology
. It is my opinion, public
libraries
should use their resources so as to invest
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modern
technology
, which could
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increase
their popularity and
income
,
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they would give an opportunity for those who not able to afford it.
Firstly
, If public
libraries
like to keep their traffic, they have to understand how
importatni
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important
could be to invest in the latest
technology
.
For
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new
softwere
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software
, videos, DVDs as important as
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newest books,
consequently
people needs are changed compared to the past and as a
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result
libraries
could
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continue
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the public.
Secondly
, since
libraries
keep visitor
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interest
due investing the latest high-tech media which would allow them to invest more money to refresh their equipment , and as a
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they could
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increase
their
income
.
Lastly
,
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gap would be smaller if public
libraries
useing
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using
some amount of their budget so as to invest
technology
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.
For instance
,
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income
familyes
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families
could afford in order to visit the library and use the same
technology
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higher social classes, which
automaticly
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automatically
helps
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society
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the social gap. In conclusion, if public
libraries
could invest their limited resource into high-tech media, it would
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increase
their
income
, popularity and it would help
lower
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class to use
a
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newer
technology
.
Therefore
, it is in my
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opinion
,
libraries
would not find a better investment for both themselves and
soceity
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society
.
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