Most people think that children must stay busy with other children's company and other feels that they should know how to keep busy themselves. Discuss

There is a popular opinion that
children
should
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involved in other
children
's company during
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time while few have an impression that
children
should be able to stay alone in their own company. Both of these opinions will be discussed in
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Firstly
,
children
like to be surrounded by love and joy all the times no matter if these are provided by their parents or by their friends. They feel motivated and encouraged when others around them are performing one or more activities and try to learn these as well. When they are together, they try to copy and compete
each
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other and learn many new things
this
way An example is
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montessori
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class where you see
children
try to learn a new rhyme. Mostly they even don't understand
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to word meanings yet they try to make
same
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sounds as peers are making and improve their language abilities. They learn more from each
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abilities and skills as compare to what they learn from their parents at home
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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