A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seems important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

These days, it seems that personal wealth and position in society are the only bases on which a person’s merit is judged. Sadly, I think it is true, nowadays in our community the appearance is everything and, unfortunately, the old fashioned values are no longer important. There are several reasons why I agree with
this
statement.
Firstly
, the society where we live is deeply interested in looks; we are “bombarded” with images over and over again which impose us, unconsciously, a model that we have to adhere to.
In other words
, people love following celebrities on social media and dreaming with their money and their material possessions. They are idols to emulate, and it is very sad that people do not want to accept that their “perfect” life, in reality, is not true. To demonstrate how much our life is conditioned from an image, a teacher and her classroom have conducted a survey sending two CVs, exactly the same, but with different pictures of the candidates (one girl which looks very nice and another overweight). The result has been that two out of three times, the nice girl has been called for an interview.
Secondly
, it is noticeable that teens are the most vulnerable part of our community. For them the appearance is everything and, if for any reason someone cannot afford to buy branded clothes or simply does not care about these trivial rules,
then
he is negatively judged and kicked out of the group. People are judged for worthless things,
such
as hairstyle, outfit, makeup, model of phone, car, house... In conclusion, I firmly believe that today our community is too influenced by appearance. It is unlikely that
this
situation will be changed soon but “hope springs eternal”.
Therefore
, we must teach our young generations about old values
such
as honour, kindness and trust, in order for them to thrive and succeed in the future.
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