Some companies spend a lot of money on scientific research and use animals for testing. Do the advantages of using animals in research outweigh its disadvantages?
A number of cosmetics and human-related
products
companies use animals
for their products
research. There are both Change the noun form
product
advantage
and Fix the agreement mistake
advantages
disadvantage
to Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantages
this
action. This
essay will state that the advantage outweighs the disadvantage.
To begin
with, the benefit is that humanity is
surely got safe Unnecessary verb
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products
because they are
tested before. It is crucial for Wrong verb form
have been
human
for the reason that if unsafe Fix the agreement mistake
humans
products
are not identified with animals
before they are released, citizens will have to use unsafe products
so that their lives are at risk. For example
, cosmetics are in the fields which test their outputs with animals
frequently. If people use some skin cares
that were not tested before, they will be contaminated by chemicals or have severe allergies, which are dangerous. Correct subject-verb agreement
care
Therefore
, testing products
with animals
is important for human's
safety.
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human
On the other hand
, it is thought by some people that animal research is torturing and killing animals
.
However
, it is not easy to do as someone thought. For instance
, the companies that need potents
or others for their research must report to the government organization. Correct your spelling
patents
In other words
, they are not be
allowed easily; they have to send many pieces of evidence. Unnecessary verb
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As a result
, the torturing and killing animals
occur hardly.
In conclusion, the pro of Change preposition
of animals
this
action is that the human will receive safety products
and the con is that animals
will be tortured and killed. This
essay stated that the benefit outweighs the drawback. However
, it is to
consider Correct word choice
important to
the
both sides rigorously and carefully.Remove the article
apply
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task response
Ensure that the arguments are addressed in a balanced manner. Consider discussing the disadvantages of using animals for research to provide a more comprehensive view.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, but they lack depth and clarity. Ensure that these sections effectively introduce and summarize the essay's key points.
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