More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree?

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Topic Vocabulary:

sedentary lifestyle
chronic conditions
holistic approach
preventive care
natural remedies
cultural heritage
ancestral knowledge
integration
complementary healthcare
regulation
standardization
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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work fro differnet organisations.Discuss bith the views and give your own opinion.

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Organized tours to remote communities and other countries are increasing popular. Is it a negative or positive development for the local people and environment ?

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