Many people think that mobile phones should be banned in public places such as libraries, shops and public transport. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, almost everyone owns a cellphone. Many believe that the use of them in

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should not be allowed. In my opinion, I agree with

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mobile phones are crucial in times of emergency.

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with, mobile phones are a mode of communication which is undeniably essential to convey message regardless of geographical location.

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could not put his phone on hold because they are in a public place since individuals can not predict what will happen during the day.

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, if you are a parent and you have a kid in school, you have to take the call from the school despite the fact that you are in a shop

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because most of the time the information will be necessary. It is not practical to totally ban cellphones because emergencies happen and so people should be

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all the time.

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, it is

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not respectful not to answer a call because it does not only affect the receiver but

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the caller as they will be worried if something has happened to you.

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, it is a good and respectable manner to switch off or put your mobile phone on silent if

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is in a library or most public areas because they are distractive. Answering a call makes

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a centre of attraction as everyone will focus on your call and they will be unable to concentrate on what they will be doing.

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, if an individual receives his call in a library all the people there will lose their focus and start listening to your conversation.

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is not only distractive but

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the mass will eavesdrop on your conversation which will not be good in the long run. Most of the time when people go to these places

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because they are not expecting any news

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, it is commendable not to talk on your cellphone in public. To sum up, being in a public place usually means you are not expecting any important or business call,

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switching your mobile phone off is essential so as not to disturb others and to focus on the agenda of the day.

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, there are some calls that can not be avoided wherever a person is because they carry

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to listen to.

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, just in case of emergency should

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answer them but generally they should be

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silent in these areas.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Distraction
Etiquette
Tranquility
Prohibit
Intrusive
Courtesy
Essential communication
Public decorum
Designated areas
Safety concerns
Noise pollution
Digital etiquette
Enforcement measures
Civic responsibility
Silent mode
Connectivity
Invasiveness
Social norms
Policy implementation
Moderation

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Many people think that mobile phones should be banned in public places such as libraries, shops and public transport. Do you agree or disagree?

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best for both individual and society. Do you agree or disagree? give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter advise them of your situation explain how this is affecting you request a new card

The world is consuming natural resources faster than they can be renewed. Therefore, it is important that products are made to last. Governments should discourage people from constantly buying up-to-date or fashionable products. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older?