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Some people think the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, think there are better ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the past few years,
crime
 rates are frequently growing across the globe. Some individuals opine that longer prison is the only way to reduce
crime
.
However
, others believe that some options available to bring down
crime
.
This
 assignment indeed to discusses both views and I shall opine my perspective too. On the one hand, many people
agree
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onagree
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this
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apply
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that the sentence for a longer period is helpful to reduce
crimes
 because these criminals are already in jail. To exemplify, a short time sentence has no change in criminals. They return from jail and again they do
crimes
 on the street. If they serve a long sentence
then
 they have fear or change in the prison.
Next
, some offenders are naturally born for
crimes
. Their upbringing is the reason they follow
this
 illegal path.
For example
, in a recent study, in America, many criminals childhood is not so good. Their parents are always abusing them and fighting with each other. These kinds of conditions are made them do
such
 terrible things in life.
On the other hand
, some people have a solution to reduce
crimes
instead
 of longer prison. The predominant method is that proper education for the children. Many youngsters do
crime
 at
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early age due to
lack
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 of education and company already on the wrong path. Proper guidance to these teenagers
help
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 them to prevent
crimes
.
Furthermore
, community and social work are the solutions for the offenders who does minor
crimes
.
This
 will make them
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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