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Today more people are travelling than ever before Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

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Today more
people
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 are travelling than ever before. The reasons for
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increase
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 are many and varied.  On a simplistic level, there is a larger
number
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 of means of transportation - there are more cars, buses and trains in operation.
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, the sheer
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 of transportation means is not enough to explain
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increase
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. The cost of travelling; even though it is at present increasing due to an economic slowdown globally; is relatively affordable to many
people
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.
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 affordability is
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 enhanced by the use of credit cards and loans in order to fund
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, especially for holiday purposes. An
increase
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 of
travel
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 companies in competition with each other has
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 helped bring package prices down, while an
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 in the
number
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 of operating flights globally has
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 increased, giving rise to falling air-fare prices.
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,
people
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 now have more leisure time and disposable incomes. The combination of these two variables with unrelenting advertising campaigns from
travel
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 companies and cruise ship operators arguably leads to an
increase
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 in the
number
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 of
people
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 travelling, in
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 case for holiday purposes. Another reason why
people
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travel
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 is going to work. More than ever before,
people
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 are travelling greater distances to get to work. Large industrial sites for both service and production industries are tending to be located outside city areas.
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 invariably leads to increases in the
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 of
people
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 travelling locally.  In conclusion, there are many reasons why more
people
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 are travelling both internationally and locally, for business and for leisure. What is sure is that
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increase
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 is likely to continue until travelling at current rates is no longer economically viable.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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