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some people think that the study of history is of little use to us. others believe that studying history help us to know the present. discuss the both view and give your opinion.

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, some people believe help us to understand the old days.
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history
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use less
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. I would like to discuss these two
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especily
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history
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 it does not help the skills that nowadays we need, I believe, we should learn
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some thing
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academic
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 or some
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practical
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wood work
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 are more useful than
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On the other hand
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pass
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 that might help
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us
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avoid
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occurred
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before
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, we could learn we should
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avoid
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 a war because all the historical stories show ous having a war will make people live in a suffer way in many
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aspects
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 to gain the
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important
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avoid
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study
history
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 and
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 the time in our life, whereas if you wanted to become a
history
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professor
 or working in the
history
 industry that might become an essential thing.
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  • repeating past mistakes
  • historical knowledge
  • economic crises
  • sense of identity
  • cultural evolution
  • community bonds
  • critical thinking
  • analytical skills
  • correlation and causation
  • irrelevant
  • policymakers
  • international relations
  • impedes
  • innovate
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