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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Smacking
children
 has become habitual nowadays among certain demographics of society. These people believe that
such
 a practice
instills
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discipline
 in the younger minds.
This
 essay will argue why smacking might not be the way to
discipline
children
 while other strategies can be implemented for the same. Often
parents
 assume that they will be able to control and have power over
children
 by physically handling them.
Children
 tend to annoy their
parents
 by throwing several tantrums.
For example
, when the adults are involved in some complicated tasks, a
child
 doing unruly things like misbehaving with another
child
 or painting all over the walls can be irritable. So, they tend to slap the
child
 on the back of their hand to scare them. These are the few reasons why most
parents
 feel smacking helps to
discipline
 the
child
.
However
, there are other ways that help
parents
 to control and
discipline
 their
children
.
Instead
 of smacking whenever a
child
 commits a mistake if
parents
 try to explain to them what are the adverse effects of their tantrums by giving them some examples, a
child
 might understand and try to behave in a good way.
For instance
, if a
child
 tries to misbehave, a parent should explain how it feels if the other
child
 talks to him in the same manner as he did. In other cases,
children
 will learn from their own mistakes and we as
parents
 should be there to guide them. If a
child
 touches a hot object, he immediately withdraws his hand from the object, and
next
 time, he will be careful about playing with things that he was told not to play with. In conclusion,
parents
 have a great responsibility in disciplining their
children
.
However
, in my opinion, smacking
children
 is definitely not the way to shape them while there are other non-violent methods that can be used to do so.
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