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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 every nation has poverty. The biggest reasons in my opinion are the economic structure of the country and the lack of education, which I will discuss in detail in
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, the economic structure of the country makes the greatest contribution to the country's development and the population which lives under the poverty line. Some
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 have the best economic layout,
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 they miss the point where to focus to reduce the number of needy
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. In my opinion, each territory must have the same regulations for lower class and rich
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, where everyone has an equal right. To reduce the number of lower economic
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,
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 should make some separate laws for considering the situation.
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education makes a significant amount of impact on development. Illiterate
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 will not be able to earn a significant amount of money to support their family needs and they will just have to rely on the labour work.
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, they will earn by doing the labour work, but will not be able to earn enough, and they will be pressed under the burden of need day by day. Each nation should have some laws regarding basic learning.
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 should provide free teaching to encourage the
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. To recapitulate, all
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 should have an economic structure which
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 of all financial class and must encourage the
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 to increase the literacy rate by providing free schooling. As it is truly said, "Education is the birthright of every child."
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