The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in ‎Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. ‎

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in ‎Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. ‎
The pie charts illustrate the total manufacture of
electricity
measured in
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and ‎divided by different
fuel
sources
in Australia and
France
in 1980 and 2000.‎
Overall
, it is clearly shown that significant
fuel
sources
used in
electricity
production
were different in Australia and
France
. ‎ First of all, there were considerably more
electricity
units
produced in Australia in ‎‎2000 (170
units
) than in 1980 (100
units
). The majority of service produced in ‎Australia for both years was from coal, but there was a higher dependency on ‎coal in
electricity
production
in 2000 than in 1980 (130 out of 170 and 50% ‎respectively). There was an increase of 16
units
of
electricity
produced by ‎hydropower from 1989 to 2008
whereas
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other
sources
like natural gas and oil ‎contributed less to
electricity
production
in 2000 than in 1980.‎ Turning to
France
's
fuel
sources
, it is apparent that
electricity
production
doubled ‎in 2000
than
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in 1980, which was 180 for the former and 90 for the latter. The ‎most striking feature is that only 15 out of 90
units
were produced by nuclear ‎power in 1980.
However
, it became the primary
fuel
source of
electricity
production
in
France
in 2000, 70%. Not forgetting to mention that other
fuel
sources
in
electricity
production
became less in 2000 than in 1980.‎
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