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Some people believe that good teamwork is what makes companies successful. Others feel that it is more important to have a good leader. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are often
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great
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success
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 others believe that a positive leader plays a vital role in the
success
 of the firm. We will discuss both ideas and at the end provide my opinion on
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Firstly
, an entity's
success
 depends on a great
team
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work
 can help the entity gain profits for
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 long term.
For instance
, multinational firms
such
 as Microsoft, which operate on a large scale need many departments for each aspect of the business and it is the collective efforts of these departments which
work
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the company to become the most profitable in the market. Right from production to sales,
team
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work
 as a chain which with good
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work
 can help to process smoothly.
On the other hand
, a right-minded leader provides a futuristic vision for the firm. The ideas developed by these top management officials can help the teams set goals.
Expertised
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Expertise
 supervision and feedbacks can
also
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certain weak areas.
For example
, the late Apple CEO Steve Jobs has been highly praised by many for inventing innovative ideas in the business. To Conclude,
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success
 depends on a great leader who can lead the business with long-term benefits and promote
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work
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Collaboration
  • Synergy
  • Cohesion
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Delegation
  • Autonomy
  • Innovation
  • Morale
  • Strategic planning
  • Charisma
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