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Many scientists are concerned about global warming. Research shows that the worldwide increase in temperature is getting worse. Furthermore, global warming seems to be related to levels of pollution in the atmosphere. Discuss the causes of global warming and possible solutions to the problem.

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Global warming has been the recent issue that everyone is concerned
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The fear had made people interested to hear for possible solutions.Many factors have been a reason
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 and both the government and the public awareness teams are trying to step forward to resolve
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 at an early stage. Global warming is basically an increase in the average temperature due to the depletion of
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer.The primary reasons have been due to
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 level of
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pollution in the atmosphere.The pollution
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 due to more carbon
emmulsion
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emulsion
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 from vehicles, industries and urbanization.The impact of
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global warming is
distructive
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destructive
 as it causes
melting
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 of ice at poles much quicker thereby increasing the ocean level and destroying the cities. The possible solutions to
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 to move towards renewable energies
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 as wind energy , solar power and
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 nuclear plants.These methods are not only cheaper but
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 environmentally friendly. Vehicles can be re-modelled to battery cars and industries can start using alternative renewable resources which can reduce air pollution.Another solution is to plant more trees
whereever
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wherever
 possible.Trees and plants purify
carbondioxide
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carbon dioxide
 and increase
oxygen
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the oxygen
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 level in the air which helps to reduce the earth's temperature. In
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 stringent steps from
government
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the government
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 in focusing on natural resources that are eco friendly and awareness on planting more trees can have
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 effect on avoiding any global impact
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 the world.
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