Government should spend money on railways rather than roads . Agree or disagree?

people
have different views about spending money on railways rather than roads.some
people
argue that build
railway
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a railway
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is much
more
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better than roads.
However
,
i
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believe that make a road is more helpful for
people
. These days,we have witnessed
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majority
majarity
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a majarity
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of
people
prefer to take
trip
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a trip
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by their own
car
.There are many reasons for
traveling
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by
car
.
For instance
,They are able to drive
the
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own pace
also
can choose which road is appropriate for arriving distinct.
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,some
people
are not
fan
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a fan
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of
traveling
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travelling
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by train because
some times
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sometimes
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the trains are overcrowded and we are restricted by schedule time.They rather using
car
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a car
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,bus. In conclusion,due to the reasons mentioned above,
i
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would argue that
,
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apply
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spending money on railways is useless.because most
people
prefer to use
car
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the car
a car
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,bus
instead
of train.
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