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Too much money is spent in maintaining and repairing old buildings, some people think they should be knocked down and give way to modern building. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's
world
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 of technology and the internet, many people believe that restoring old monuments is just
waste
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a waste
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 of money and energy.
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 of maintaining
them
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 they should be demolished and
one
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 should construct
new
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a new
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 property.
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However
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,However
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 I believe keeping old structure are as important as keeping our history alive.
Firstly
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, old buildings are part of
Country's
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the Country's
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 rich heritage and it is vital to keep them for future generations. By way of keeping
them
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,them
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 we can demonstrate how rich our culture is and at the same
time
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,time
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 it holds significant importance as they are
timeless
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a timeless
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 piece of art.
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 in many parts of India especially in
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the state
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state
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the state
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 of
Rajasthan
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,Rajasthan
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 you can find spectacular forts which are
pleasure
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a pleasure
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 for
eyes
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the eyes
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 and
finest
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the finest
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 piece of architecture. With the help of annual repair and maintenance work if those forts can regain their old charm
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 why shouldn't we keep them?
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, old structures attract tourist from all over the
world
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 which will not only help the economy but
also
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 generates employment opportunities to the youth.
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,
Taj
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the Taj
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 Mahal
one
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 of the seven wonders of the
world
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 based out in Agra, India attracts millions of tourist
accross
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across
 the globe.
This
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 not only put India on
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world
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the world
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 map but
also
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 help
local
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the local
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 community to flourish. There are many erections which
forms
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 part of the
World
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 Heritage site for which organization provide funds to maintain them on yearly basis and if any alteration
need
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needs
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 to be done to those properties prior approval has to be taken. To conclude
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this establishments
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this establishment
these establishments
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 are part of history and national asset which
one
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 should be proud of and should not be demolished at any cost.
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, they should be preserved in their
as is
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as-is
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state
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a state
the state
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 so that we can show it to our upcoming generation and they can learn from
those finest architecture
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that finest architecture
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. There are
many
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much
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 open
space
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spaces
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 where
one
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 can construct new modern structures
instead
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 of breaking old ones.

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